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Lower
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Comment
This answer has some potential but does not develop the points it makes and its poor level of expression sometimes means that it is imprecise or unclear. There is little contextual reference and only one mention of a critical view – a nod to feminism. Links made between the texts are sometimes tenuous and the answer ends abruptly.
For a Mid Level
- Write in a more formal style and use appropriate terminology accurately, e.g. irony. (AO1)
- Have a clear plan and leave time to deal with each point rather than rush the conclusion. (AO1)
- Include some fuller reference to context and critical thought to support own views. (AO5)
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