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Comment
The understanding of character development is expressed and some sound points are made, though not always clearly enough. Paragraphs are used effectively, but vocabulary is limited and words or expressions repeated. The overall effect is too chatty in tone. The student needs to write in a more formal style and should also discuss the effects Syal creates, referring to literary terms.
For a Good Level:
- Develop a formal critical style, drawing on a wider range of vocabulary and avoid informal language or slang.
- Show how the novelist creates effects with language devices.
- Make sure quotations are embedded in sentences so that when a sentence is read it flows easily and the quotation feels part of it.
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