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Grade 7
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Comment
The essay offers a thoughtful response to the question and text, particularly in contrasting the different behaviour of Mickey and Edward towards Linda. There is some insight into Russell’s method and use of context. Some points need more analytical precision, or clearer development, and more focus on the characterisation of Linda would strengthen the argument.
For Grades 8–9
- Ensure that the final point is an effective conclusion to the opening argument.
- Explore points with more purposeful analysis to make sure that thoughts are followed through fully and clearly relevant.
- Analyse how the structure of the text creates meaning.
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