Examiner's Grade
Grades 6–7
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Comment
The essay makes some good points, but some of them warrant further explanation or development. Generally, this is a good answer showing a solid grasp of the text and the theme of secrecy. A tighter structure would help, as sometimes it lists examples of secrecy without fully showing their effect. These could be tied together to make a better argument.
For Grades 8–9
- Extend the point about us thinking Hyde is a clever criminal to say Stevenson misleads us here and elsewhere about what the hidden information is, and how this works in the novel.
- Extend the reference to the Bible story to say what effect Stevenson achieves by alluding to it.
- Tighten the structure and increase the range of vocabulary used.
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